The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
number
of
people
who participated in various sports like
tennis
,
basketball
,
cricket
, golf, swimming, football, and rugby in an area, in 1997 and 2017. The
number
of adults
are
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depicted in thousands.
Overall
,
tennis
was the most popular sport during both years,
while
basketball
was the least popular sport in 1997,
however
, it became quite famous in the next two decades, and the spot for the least popular sport was replaced by
cricket
. In 1997, 50,000
people
played
tennis
, which was the highest
amongst
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all sports, followed by nearly 35,000 individuals who preferred swimming. Rugby was the third most popular with about 32,000
people
, closely followed by 31,000
people
who preferred golf and football respectively.
Cricket
was enjoyed by approximately 25,000
people
.
Lastly
,
basketball
was the preference of only 9,000 adults.
Although
the preferences of
people
changed quite a lot in 20 years, the popularity of
basketball
stayed undefeated, with 54,000
people
participating in
tennis
. The
number
of
people
who played football and rugby substantially increased to approximately 39,000. Statistics of
people
who enjoyed swimming stayed constant over the years. There was a rise in the
number
of
people
who played
basketball
, to 22,000
people
in 2017.
On the other hand
, the
adults
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participating in
cricket
significantly decreased to 7,000. In conclusion,
while
all the sports had an increase in the
number
of
people
participating from 1997 to 2017,
cricket
was the only one with a significant plunge in statistics.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, tennis, basketball, cricket with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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