You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

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The graphs provide proportions of electronic

devices

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device

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owners, specifically for washing

machine

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machines

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refrigerator

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refrigerators

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, and vacuum

cleaner

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cleaners

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along with

weekly hours of chores in a household from 1920 to 2019, with a 20-year gap between each year.

Overall

, the number of all appliances

increase

Correct subject-verb agreement

increases

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over the year

while

the chores' time significantly reaches

opposite

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the opposite

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apply

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that

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apply

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. We can conclude that the higher the amount of home

appliances

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appliance

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users in a household, the less time it takes to finish

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apply

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housework, especially related to cleaning jobs and washing clothes. If we focus more on

the

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apply

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home devices, refrigerator users have a dramatic upward tendency, reaching almost a hundred

percent

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per cent

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increase over the others.

Similarly

, washing machines and vacuum cleaners, which

have been

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were

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slightly more popular than

refrigerator

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refrigerators

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at the start,

also

running

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ran

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to the same end but the former ended up shorter than the latter by 35%.

On the other hand

, the hours of chores in a household

noticably

Correct your spelling

noticeably

get lower as the year goes

, with

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by, with

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a difference of 40 hours between 1920 and 2019.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

173 words

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