You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The graphs provide proportions of electronic
devices
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device
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owners, specifically for washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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,
along with
weekly hours of chores in a household from 1920 to 2019, with a 20-year gap between each year.
Overall
, the number of all appliances
increase
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increases
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over the year
while
the chores' time significantly reaches
opposite
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the opposite
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to
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apply
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that
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. We can conclude that the higher the amount of home
appliances
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appliance
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users in a household, the less time it takes to finish
a
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apply
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housework, especially related to cleaning jobs and washing clothes. If we focus more on
the
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home devices, refrigerator users have a dramatic upward tendency, reaching almost a hundred
percent
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per cent
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increase over the others.
Similarly
, washing machines and vacuum cleaners, which
have been
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were
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slightly more popular than
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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at the start,
also
running
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ran
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to the same end but the former ended up shorter than the latter by 35%.
On the other hand
, the hours of chores in a household
noticably
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noticeably
get lower as the year goes
, with
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by, with
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a difference of 40 hours between 1920 and 2019.
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