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lt is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Saving money since adolescence is very useful for the future. Personally, I could not agree more with
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 idea because not only does it help you to buy your own things, but it
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 gives you independence from your parents. So many people spend enormous quantities of money in their youth on useless items ,
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 as new clothes each month or the newest phone on the market. Small expenses like trash food can seem irrelevant at the beginning, but
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, when you calculate how much you spent in a year, the amount is terrifying.
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 of that, if you save money and you arrive at a certain age with significant wealth, you are able to buy things like your first car or maybe your first house.
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, a study done at the University of Alabama showed that 75% of people between 25 to 35 years old regret spending that quantity in their youth because after that, it became so much difficult for them to allow themselves little luxuries.
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, apart from helping to buy material things, it gives you a feeling of independence from your parents from a young age. It is very common to see how teenagers sometimes have part-time jobs to earn their first wages and , in
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 way , not depend on their parents for their expenses.
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, it rewards these teenagers with the feeling of being self-sufficient and knowing how much work it takes to gain some capital in order to make them more grateful.
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, when I was 15 years old, I started working as a waiter in the evenings and with my wage, I used to pay when I wanted to go out at weekends.
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 made me more conscious about the economy and made me feel better about myself.
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, I totally agree with the idea of saving capital from a very young age to pay your own expenses and,
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, not depending on someone to pay it all for you, because it will help you in the future.

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Task response
Be clear at the start. State if you agree and keep that view to the end of the essay.
Coherence
Plan your writing. Use two body parts. Each part has one main idea and one simple example.
Language
Use short, easy sentences. Watch small grammar and tone mistakes.
idea
Your view is clear and easy to follow.
strength
You use a real life example to back your idea.
structure
The end restates your view and gives closure.
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