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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The following graph depicts the number of
people
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 who used the
Internet
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 from 2003 to 2006 and their
age
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 groups.
It is clear that
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 teenagers and young adults aged between 16 to 24 used
the
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it the
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 most
internet
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while
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people
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 who were above 65 used it significantly less. In 2003, 80% per cent of
people
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 who were aged between 16 to 24 used the
Internet
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, followed by 60% of
people
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 who were aged between 45-54. Half of the population of
people
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 aged between 25-44 used the
internet
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 in 2003,
while
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 all the other
age
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categories
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 were below 50%. In 2004,
in contrast
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 to all the
age
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categories
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 showing an increase in
percentage
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 points,
people
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 aged between 16-24 and
people
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 who were above 65 showed a constant
percentage
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 and a decline respectively. In 2005 and 2006, all the
age
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categories
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 showed an incline except
people
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 aged between 16 and 24 which showed an adequate decrease in
percentage
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 points in 2006.
To conclude
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, all the
age
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categories
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 showed an incline in the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who use the
Internet
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, internet, age, categories, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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