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The map below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The map below shows university sports courts in 1990 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The map above depicts
an information
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information
a piece of information
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 about university
sport
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sports
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 courts
in
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at
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 different times, to be exact in 1990 and in the present.
Overall
, there are some changes that can be seen on the map, like
added
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adding
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tennis
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a tennis
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 court and
removed
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removing
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park
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the park
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. To start with, in 1990, there was a
park
 on the corner on the left. But, now the place has been replaced become a basketball court.
Next,
in 1990, below
of
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apply
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the
park
, there was a car
park
.
However
, there is no car
park
 anymore on the recent map. That place changed into four
tennis
 courts. Beforehand, the position of
tennis
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the tennis
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 court was on the right side and only two. After that, the position of
changing
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the changing
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 room
also
shifting
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shifted
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, from under reception to slightly
move
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apply
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to the east direction. Afterwards,
tennis
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the tennis
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 courts that
was
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were
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 mentioned before,
turned
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were turned
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 into fitness
centre
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centres
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.
Cafe
Correct article usage
The cafe
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 and receptionist still remain in their position.
Nonetheless
, the outdoor pool has been turned
to be
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into
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 an indoor pool.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tennis, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • layout
  • facilities
  • diversified infrastructure
  • accessibility
  • expansion
  • investment
  • indoors fitness activities
  • modern health trends
  • transformation
  • commitment
  • sportsmanship
  • competitive sports culture
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