the line chart show the prison population in a european country from 1911 to 2001

the line chart show the prison population in a european country from 1911 to 2001
The two-line graph compares the
number
of
prisoners
in a European area over 90
years
from 1911.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there was a contrasting trend in the prison population
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Whilst the highest
number
of
prisoners
was recorded from males, the opposite can be seen in females showing a consistent decrease in given
years
. In 1911, under 20,000 male
prisoners
were shown, six times higher than 3,200 female ones.
This
figure remained ten
years
later before decreasing in 1931, hitting a low at 10,000
prisoners
. Before recovering 20,000, the figure experienced
a
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consistent stability until 1971, after which it rose dramatically to 40,000 in 1981. And
then
, the
number
sharply grew before
finally
peaking at 45,000 in 2001.
By contrast
, the
number
of female
prisoners
witnessed a dramatic decline in the
30-
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30-year
years
years
period from 1911, and
then
it reached a trough at 6,000 in 1941.
This
figure later increased gradually in the next
years
till 1961, before returning under 1,000
prisoners
in 1971.
After
this
, it experienced steady growth in the prison population and stood at 1,800 people in 2001.
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