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Sompe people say now is the best time in history to be living. what is your opinion about this? what other time in history would be interesting to live in?

#sompe #people #time #history
Some people argue that now is the best time to be living in history
while
 some might think differently.
This
 is
fascinating
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a fascinating
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 question and
im
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I'm
 going to open it a bit.
Firstly
, technical revolutions
has
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have
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give
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given
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 people much luxury to
todays
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today's
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 everyday life.
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, people can order food from
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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, we can communicate with anyone and anywhere. Machines have made
humans
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human
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 life much easier than ever.
Therefore
,
need
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the need
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 for physical labor has gone down.
Working
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The working
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eviroment
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environment
 has increased a lot,
for example
, there
is
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are
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 many laws defining work. Medical care has improved a lot since history and we have developed very effective vaccines against diseases.
For instance
,
childbird
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child
 deaths have decreased dramatically since history. Still,
golden
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the golden
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 era of
Roman
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the Roman
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empire
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Empire
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 could have been very interesting to live
.
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in.
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Firstly
, interesting places to visit would have been
Roman
colossiums
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colosseums
colosseum
,
aqueduct
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aqueducts
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,
forum
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and forum
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romanum
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Romanum
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. I am still amazed
how
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at how
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 smart and
hard working
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hard-working
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 the Romans were,
for instance
, think about how much hard work and determination all
Roman
 roads required. So be said, we have Romans to thank for all the technology to
this
 day. Did you know that aqueducts are still in some countries?
That is
good
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a good
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at
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of
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 sustainable technology. To summarize, the present timeline is likely to be amazingly good for living. We have all the technology and
healtcare
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healthcare
 available to us. In my opinion, we have still lots of potential to grow as
human
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a human
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 race.
Roman
 Empire would have been
interesting
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an interesting
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 era to live
on
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in
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 because of
fascinating
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its fascinating
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 culture.
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grammar
There are some grammatical and spelling errors that need to be addressed for a higher score.
task achievement
Although your response is quite comprehensive, try to add more specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
lexical resource
Attempt to use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to elevate your response.
introduction conclusion
You have presented a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your essay effectively.
task achievement
The points made for the current era and the Roman Empire are relevant and interesting, showcasing your understanding of historical contexts.
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