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Write a letter about the camping trip and send it to your friend

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Dear John, I hope you are doing well. How's everything going? I am thrilled to tell you about my
last
 camping visit which was
a
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great fun. My parents and I decided to visit Shimla for our summer vacation. So, we booked a flight on the 21st of
the
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June. Let me tell you about the place where we visited- 'The Hills Love'. I love the
tranquility
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 and the beauty of
the
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nature, We did the climbing as well. We
also
 cooked food there
such
 as
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 to enjoy the spectacular view of the place. I would highly recommend
you
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this
 place as I know you've
keen
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 interest in
this
 type of beautiful
scenaries
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. I knew
this
 time as well that you
will
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 not
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 a chance to explore. The one thing which you must carry is high-ankle boots which will help you in wet weather conditions. I am looking forward to hearing from you. See you soon. Warm Regards, Ravinder
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coherence cohesion
While your letter has a strong structure and generally follows a single idea per paragraph, consider enhancing the clarity by separating the different activities and suggestions into distinct paragraphs for easier reading. For instance, you could break down the activities you did, the food you cooked, and the recommendations for visits into separate sections.
task achievement
To achieve a higher mark in task achievement, be mindful of minor grammatical errors and phrasing. For example, 'great fun' could be improved to 'a great deal of fun' and 'you've keen interest' to 'you have a keen interest'. Small adjustments like these can enhance readability and overall response quality.
task achievement
Your writing tone is very friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend. This makes your letter engaging and easy to read.
task achievement
You have provided a complete and relevant response to the task, covering the important aspects of your camping trip and giving suitable recommendations.
coherence cohesion
The opening and closing of your letter are well-done, giving a personal and warm touch that suits the context of writing to a friend.
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