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The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.

The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000.
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The bar graph illustrates the
propotion
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proportion
 of
people
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 who used
variouse
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various
 types of transport From 1960 to 200 in a
Eurpean
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European
.
overall
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,
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,
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apply
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falk
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the falk
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 who
transport
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travel
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 on foot and
used
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use
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bike
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a bike
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go
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went
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 down
sigrirficantely
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significantly
while
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 the percentage who
used
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use
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car
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a car
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increase
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increased
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quielly
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quickly
 in 2000. In 1960,
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the propotion
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propotion
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proportion
promotion
 of folk who
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were transported
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transported
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travelled
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 on foot
areund
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around
 33% ,
whereas
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people
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a car
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car
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cars
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 were
abont
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about
 5%. percentage Bikes and
bus
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buses
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 around 25% and 18% respectively. In 1980, using the bus was more popular with citizens about 22% of total
travelers
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travellers
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,
however
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propotion
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proportion
 of
people
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 about 18%
who
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apply
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preferred
trasportad
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transported
transport
on
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for
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 food . In 2000, transporting by cars between
people
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inerease
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increase
increased
considerable
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considerably
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were
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accounting for over 40% of
total
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the total
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of
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population .
Also
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 in
this
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 period used buses as transport means were around 8%. Foot and bike were 9% and 6% respectively. The development among
people
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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