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Individual can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#environment #governments #companies #difference
Environmental
issues
 are one of the most burning
issues
 these days.
While
 it is argued that people do not have any responsibility to tackle environmental problems and just the
government
's
role
 comes up, I firmly agree that the public has definite duties in order to help authorities.
Government
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, undoubtedly, plays a crucial
role
 in remedying environmental situations.
For example
, the
government
 need to implement strategies for solving global warming or CO2 emissions in society. I concede that
although
 there is the majority of literate experts in the
government
 team
who
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apply
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have
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 budget for tackling these sorts of subjects, the problem is that, I think, addressing these kinds of
issues
 would not be possible without society's willingness and help. Individuals may have been responsible for several environmental problems.
Although
 it could not occur without increasing the awareness of the crowds, there are different ways to develop public knowledge about environments. Schools,
for instance
, have a noteworthy
role
 in
this
 issue that could have an indirect impact on any family.
Moreover
, little steps and activities may be strongly helpful.
For example
, by reducing the usage of non-renewable energies, people not only help the
government
 to control global warming but
also
 can make their own lives healthier. Apart from that, I think the public has a faster effect , either in positive ways or negative, on the environment compared to the environment as the authorities must think about several infrastructures on a vast scale. All being said,
although
 environmental
issues
 are said to be tackled just by governments without individual participation, I wholeheartedly believe that the
government
 can not be capable without public co-operating. I am sure that the people's
role
 in finding measures for environmental
issues
 is undeniable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • green technologies
  • lifestyle changes
  • reducing waste
  • recycling
  • conserving energy
  • grassroots movements
  • community organizations
  • awareness campaigns
  • public pressure
  • environmentally friendly policies
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