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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.
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The two graphs
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 the
amount
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 of
water
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 used worldwide in 3 sectors, related to human activities, and the proportion of
water
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consumption
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 in
Brazil
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 and
Congo
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.
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, there are 3 sectors of human activities that need
water
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, consisting of Agricultural, Industrial and Domestic use.
Brazil
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 had
higher
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 population compared to
Congo
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. The
amount
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 of both irrigated land and
water
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consumption
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 in
Brazil
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 is higher. The
amount
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 of
water
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 used in 3 sectors rose continuously from 1900 to 2000, particularly in Agriculture.
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 accounted for 500km3 in 1900 and 3000km3 in 2000.
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 was the highest
amount
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 of
water
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 used for human activities when compared to Industrial and Domestic use, starting from around 1km3 to over 1000km3 of
water
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 used in Industries and to over 500km3 for household use.
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, it is shown in the table that the
water
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consumption
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 in
Brazil
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 in 2000 was higher than that in
Congo
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.
Brazil
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's population was 176 million in 2000 the total area of irrigated land at 26,500km3, resulting in the total
amount
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 of
water
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consumption
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 per person at 395m3.
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Congo
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 in which the population was at 5.2 million with only 100km3 of the irrigated land.
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 resulted in a lower
amount
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 of
water
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consumption
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 per person at only 8m3
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, water, consumption, brazil, congo, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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