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Many people join distance-learning programmes and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often argued that many
people
 provide online learning for some reason, but there are
people
 who think that if they attend the
classes
 it will be more beneficial. But there are
also
people
 who want to have online
classes
. In my opinion, I consider attending
classes
 will have much benefit more than online
classes
 for many reasons, and
also
 I will discuss both opinions in
this
 essay. First
people
 who choose online learning may have their own reasons,
For example
, it is hard to go to the university because of the road or they don't have anyone to drive them there,
also
, they feel more comfortable than attending the university,
Furthermore
, they
love
 to have everything on online because it is easy for them to revise information. On the other side.
People
 who
love
 attending
classes
love
 to hear and see, they have an idea that if they don't see the teacher explain something they will not understand,
also
, they may have a car to go to university so it is easy for them to attend.
In addition
, they
love
 to write with their hand more than using a personal computer, In conclusion. In my point of view I see attending class could have more benefits for the student,
i
Change the capitalization
I
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 feel more comfortable and I really enjoy face-to-face learning, but, not everyone has the ability to understand online or face-to-face learning, so they choose whatever they want every choice has its advantages and disadvantages
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task achievement
Ensure that you clearly introduce the topic and rephrase the essay question in the introduction. Avoid listing both opinions too broadly.
task achievement
Provide more precise examples to support your points, such as specific cases of students benefiting from online or in-person education.
coherence cohesion
Enhance logical flow by structuring your paragraphs to seamlessly connect one idea to the next. Consider using transition phrases to guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
Review grammatical accuracy and enrich vocabulary to improve the variety and complexity of sentence structures.
task achievement
The essay correctly addresses the topic and provides a balanced view by discussing both online and in-person learning.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, which gives the essay a clear structure.

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