The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second

chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The given two pie charts were broken down into six categories and
presents
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present
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the percentages of how
many
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much
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energy
was consumed, and the number of
greenhouse
gas
emissions
, both for Australian households. As can be seen from the pie chart
that
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heating and water heating occupied the majority of
energy
consumption and
greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
However
, they produced only half of the
energy
consumption. The second biggest
greenhouse
emission contributor
were
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other appliances. It is obvious that heating used 42% of
energy
while
it only emitted 15% of
greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
On the contrary
, other appliances consumed no more than a fifth of
energy
, but
it
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they
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produced almost 30% of
greenhouse
gas
emissions
.
Similarly
, refrigerators and lighting used only 7% and 4 % of
energy
,
nonetheless
, their
emissions
was
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doubled by 14% and 8%, respectively.
On the other hand
, it is interesting to note that the numbers for water heating and cooling in both categories were nearly equal, and their discrepancy was just 1% to 2%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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