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Space research costs billions of dollars. Some people believe that the money should be invested on more practical projects here on Earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The investments
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 exploring
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space
 are constantly increasing,
however
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 it seems more reasonable to use the same amount of money for projects on planet
Earth
. In
this
 essay, I explain why I agree
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this
 statement by exploring two main argumentations: the expedictions in
the
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space
 are not for the benefit of the world population but the the ecological impact
concern
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concerns
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 everyone. In my opinion,
the
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space
research
 is highly financed by
strongest
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 governments or private corporations as a way to
take
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decision
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decisions
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 on how the territories in the
space
 will be managed. Since there is
not a
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 clear, legal, international legislation yet, the benefits of
such
 experimentation, at the moment, are only for the countries or the companies that are investing in
this
 sector.
Although
 the experimentations in
space
 allowed,
for instance
, the introduction of satellites, what mainly drives the
space
researches
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research
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 is the control and management over the solar system and beyond.
For example
, at the beginning of the conflict between Russia and Ukraine,
Space
 X offered to Ukraine for free the use of its satellites to control and eventually defend its territories.
However
, after almost one year of conflict, the
corporate
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 asked
a
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payment for
this
 service. Another important issue is the ecological impact that
space
research
 has on planet
Earth
,
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 because
this
 kind of
research
 implies a lot of
experimentations
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experimentation
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along with
 the launch of new devices, capsules,
satellites
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and satellites
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. Specifically, many tests in the
space
 consume high levels of fuel, and at the same time, produce waste and pollution with severe repercussions on
the
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global health.
For
this
 reason, it seems extremely controversial to invest resources
on
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space
instead
 of
Earth
. Several
expertises
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experts
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 are declaring that around the globe there is a cloud of waste
that is
 extremely dangerous and they are
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 about the consequences of the expansion of the
space
 industry especially in relation to the downside it has on
the
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climate change. In conclusion,
space
research
 is not beneficial for everyone, but the consequences of
such
investements
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investments
weight
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weigh
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 on all the population of
Earth
.
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While your essay introduces your arguments clearly and provides a conclusion, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and expand on it systematically. This can improve the logical structure of your writing.
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