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The line graph shows the per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999

The line graph shows the per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999
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The given line graph depicts the number of
thefts
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 per thousand vehicles in four countries(Great Britain, Sweden, France and Canada), over a nine-year period between 1990 and 1999.
Overall
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, It can be seen that Great Britain had the highest number of car
thefts
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in
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of
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 all time.
However
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, Sweden approached Great Britain
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at
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in
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 the end with
significant
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a significant
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 increase.
Although
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, France and Canada have decreased. In 1990, in Sweden, the number of car
thefts
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 was
approximantly
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approximately
 8 per 1000 vehicles. Next 6 years it increased steadily. After
that
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 it was stable at 12 between 1996 and 1998. In 1999 it considerably increased to 14.
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, Canada had 7
thefts
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 per 100 transports at the start.
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, it
droped
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dropped
 to 5 in 1993. After it

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thefts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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