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The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the Qatari and Omani import totals (in tons) for several types of vegetables in 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the total number of several types of vegetables imported by two different countries which were Qatar and Omani in 1990.
Overall
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, Qatar needed
spinach
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 more than other commodities.
While
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,
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garlic
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 in Omani became the highest demand over the year shown. Looking at the information in detail, it can be seen that
spinach
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demanding
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 in Qatar was around 450
tones
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 during 1990 followed by
garlic
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 and ginger in the second and third positions respectively.
By contrast
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, only 150 tonnes of peas
brought
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 from outside
nation
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the nation
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 and it was threefold lower than
spinach
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.
In addition
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, 220
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tones
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tonnes
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 of broccoli consumption came from foreign. In 1990, Oman paid 800
tones
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 of
garlic
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 and 600
tones
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for
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of
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spinach
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. Brocolli and ginger accounted for respective 300
tones
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, twofold as small as
garlic
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. These vegetables
therefore
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 were the smallest compared with other commodities. Peas from international farmers sold in Oman in 1990
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for
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total
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a total
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400
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of 400
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 tonnes.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words spinach, garlic, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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