Some people believe that the effective way to reduce industrial pollution is to tax the companies which cause these types of pollution. others think that there are other ways. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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the efficient way of reducing industrial
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is
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tax
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taxes
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among
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companies
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, which are responsible for
pollution
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. Others believe that there are other options to solve
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both views and provide
personal
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opinion. Imposing
tax
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on
companies
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, which are responsible for industrial
pollution
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can be effective in some ways, as the
companies
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will become cautious about
pollution
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. If the
companies
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require
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to pay
tax
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their
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productivity
and
pollution
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, they will be encouraged not to pollute
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and will take protective measures to save
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. Take the UK as an example. The government of
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imposed
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tax
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a tax
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on water
pollution
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in 2019, which
occured
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occurred
mostly
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the
garments
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industries. The
pollution
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decreased
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upto
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up to
70% after imposing the
tax
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.
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, I personally believe that taxing can help to reduce the
pollution
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occoured
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caused
by the industries. Other ways of minimizing
pollution
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are creating awareness among the general public about
pollution
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. Not only the
companies
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,
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but
also
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the several deeds of the irresponsible general public can cause
pollution
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. If it can be addressed as well,
pollution
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will definitely be reduced.
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, in Australia, there are campaigns running in the schools, which aim at minimizing plastic
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to create awareness among the school children.
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, I believe that campaigns do not help much
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increasing awareness among
public
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, and ultimately will not contribute to reducing
pollution
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because
pollution
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mostly
occured
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occurs
by industrial
companies
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.
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, as
companies
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are mostly responsible for
pollution
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, taxation on them is the best possible way to tackle
pollution
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Coherence & Cohesion
You must clarify your main arguments to make your essay more coherent. Ensure each paragraph discusses one main idea and expands upon it clearly.
Coherence & Cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your essay by using more transitional phrases between sentences and paragraphs to guide the reader through your argument.
Task Response
Further elaborate on your points with more specific details and examples to strengthen your arguments.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on varying your sentence structures to improve the overall readability and sophistication of your writing.
Task Response
You have provided specific examples to support your points, such as the UK imposing tax on water pollution.
Coherence & Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and present a coherent perspective, which is good for overall structure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial deterrent
  • adopt cleaner technologies
  • emissions
  • environmental impact
  • standards
  • emission caps
  • pollution control devices
  • green technologies
  • sustainable practices
  • subsidies
  • eco-friendly solutions
  • punitive measures
  • public awareness campaigns
  • consumer pressure
  • environmental footprint
  • sustainable practices
  • stricter enforcement
  • severe penalties
  • combined approach
  • combat industrial pollution
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