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The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The table illustrates the monthly check of
teachers
 in secondary/high schools in Australia, Denmark,
Luxembourg
, Japan, and Korea in the year of 2009.
Overall
, it is apparent that
teachers
 in
Luxembourg
 receive the highest amount of money out
all
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of all
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 of the other countries by a significant difference compared to Australian
teachers
 who have the lowest amount. Regarding the starting and after 15
years
'
salary
, as mentioned
teachers
 in
Luxembourg
 receive 80,000 and 119,000 after 15
years
, which makes
Luxembourg
 the most paying country out of the table. In opposition, Australia pays
teachers
 28,000 as a starter, which is the lowest
salary
 among all named countries, and 48,000 after 15
years
 equal
as
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 Korean
teachers
. Japan and Korea pay around the same as a starting
salary
. Turning to the maximum
salary
 and how many
years
 needed to have it,
Luxembourg
 is on the top with
132,000
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a 132,000
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 maximum and 30
years
 to reach it. Denmark has the least number of
years
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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is
Verb problem
takes
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 8
years
 to get the maximum payment which is 54,000
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 is
unchenged
Correct your spelling
unchanged
;
similarly
, Australian
teachers
' maximum
salary
 is the same (48,000) with 9
years
 to reach it. The highest
years
' number needed to reach a maximum
salary
 is 37
years
 in Japan to get 86,000, which is the second highest
salary
 after
Luxembourg
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, luxembourg, years, salary with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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