The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The table illustrates the monthly check of

teachers

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in secondary/high schools in Australia, Denmark,

Luxembourg

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, Japan, and Korea in the year of 2009.

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, it is apparent that

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Luxembourg

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receive the highest amount of money out

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of the other countries by a significant difference compared to Australian

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who have the lowest amount. Regarding the starting and after 15

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, as mentioned

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Luxembourg

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receive 80,000 and 119,000 after 15

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, which makes

Luxembourg

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the most paying country out of the table. In opposition, Australia pays

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28,000 as a starter, which is the lowest

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among all named countries, and 48,000 after 15

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equal

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Korean

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. Japan and Korea pay around the same as a starting

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. Turning to the maximum

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and how many

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needed to have it,

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is on the top with

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maximum and 30

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to reach it. Denmark has the least number of

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years

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to get the maximum payment which is 54,000

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unchanged

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, Australian

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' maximum

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is the same (48,000) with 9

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to reach it. The highest

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' number needed to reach a maximum

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is 37

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in Japan to get 86,000, which is the second highest

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after

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The table below gives information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in five countries in 2009. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think is a positive or a negative development?