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Write a letter to the company. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like to do and say what experience and skills you have

#company #sort #job #skills
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for the temporary job of a sales manager in your company. I read an advertisement regarding
this
 job in the Employment News Weekly a through that advert I came to know that you need
sales
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a sales
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 manager. I have graduated
university
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from university
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. My major was International Marketing. It is very important for me to work so that I get practical experience.
Also
, I would love to open my own company and
this
 experience would help me a lot. I applied for
this
 job because I have good communication skills and I love meeting people. I know I would provide excellent service. I am available to come for an interview at your convenience and look forward to hearing from you soon.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Laziza.
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Include a brief introduction about yourself at the beginning of the letter to give the reader a better sense of who you are.
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Provide more details about your qualifications and previous work experiences to strengthen your application.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas between paragraphs. Use linking words or phrases to create smoother transitions.
coherence cohesion
Revise and correct minor grammatical errors to enhance readability.
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You have clearly indicated the job you are applying for and where you found the advertisement. This addresses the task requirements well.
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The letter maintains a polite and professional tone throughout, which is suitable for an application letter.
coherence cohesion
You have reiterated your availability for an interview and expressed enthusiasm for the role, which leaves a positive impression.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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