The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information 

Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make 

comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The line chart displays the number of questions collected by the Tourist Information Center in a particular area, in a span of six months during 2011.
Overall
, the general trends
shows
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that the information that was obtained through face-to-face or by telephone made a dramatic increase.
Where as
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, by letter or email it showed a major decline.
Also
, the majority
prefered
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preferred
to go in
person
than by calling or writing. As per the results, in
person
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person,
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figure
was the most popular pick as it showed an
increase
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rate. Starting just above 400 until June where it peaked
the
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highest
amongs
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among
amongst
all lines and reached over 1800.
In addition
, the telephone
figure
showed a
flucuation
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fluctuation
between January and March which lead to be constant until April. The graph shows in the
last
two months the
figure
increased rapidly.
Furthermore
,
letters
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or emails
figure
demonstrates
the
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slow decrease in the first three months. In May and
June
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June,
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there was an unchanging rate. As the graph illustrates, people
prefered
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preferred
going in
person
than writing an email.
However
,
in
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in-person
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person
began as the lowest rate and it eventually became the
highest demand
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highest-demand
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pick.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words person, figure with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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