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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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Overall
Linking Words
,
in
Change the preposition
at
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 the beginning of the period , By telephone was highest and In person was lowest In comparison,
number
Correct article usage
the number
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 of inquiries received by the Tourist Information
at the end
Linking Words
 of the period, In person was the most and By telephone
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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the least number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • Overall trend
  • Sharp increase
  • Gradual decline
  • Peak
  • Fluctuation
  • Outnumbered
  • Dominated
  • In-person inquiries
  • By telephone
  • By letter/email
  • Correspondence
  • Interpersonal
  • Communication method
  • Popularity
  • Comparison
  • Tourism season
  • Visitor engagement
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