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Yoga excersise What shall you do How do you feel about that

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Nadi Shodana We will finish with just a few rounds of nadi shodana alternating
nostril
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 breathing. We'
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 using the
right
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 thumb and the
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 ring finger, the
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 thumb to close the
right
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nostril
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,
the
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and the
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right
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 ring finger to close the left
nostril
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. I have a tutorial on
this
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 specific breathing exercise up here in the corner you can click
there
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here
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 or just later when the video ends you can go to the
breath
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 work playlist and there's a selection of about. I think 10 or so different breathing exercises which I do and be as well almost every day and they'
re
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 very beneficial to help you breathe better.
Exhale
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 all the air out, use the
right
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 thumb close the
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nostril
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,
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inhale
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and inhale
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 through the left side. At the top, close the left
nostril
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 open the
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,
exhale
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 through the
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 side
inhale
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 through the
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nostril
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. At the top, close the
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nostril
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 open the left
exhale
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 to the left that's one round. Let's do four more
Correct subject-verb agreement
inhales
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inhale
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 to the left
exhale
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 toward the
right
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inhale
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 through the
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exhale
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 through the left. Three more rounds on your own, just keep the
breath
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 flowing a normal
breath
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 through the nose in and out without lengthening, without controlling, without changing. It much. We'
re
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 just redirecting the
breath
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 through the nostrils left and
right
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 but we'
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 not necessarily controlling the
breath
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 in length or depth.
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 round breathe deeper into the belly and finish up your round by exhaling out through the left
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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