the graph below show the number of shops that closed and the number o fnewshops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

the graph below show the number of shops that closed and the number o fnewshops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The chart illustrates the total count of
closures
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of existing shops and
openings
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the new ones in a part of the world from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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,
although
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there are downward trends for both types of stores, the
number
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of
openings
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experienced a substantial decline in comparison to
closures
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.
In addition
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, the proportion of
closures
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experienced a dramatic dip during seven years. It is noticeable the
openings
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had the highest figure at the beginning
in
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2011. From 2011 to 2014, the
number
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of
openings
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started with nearly 8,500 stores, falling significantly to just under 4,000, and
then
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rose to slightly more than 6,000.
On the other hand
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, the figure for
closures
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displayed a fluctuation, starting from nearly 6,000.
It is clear that
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it reached a peak of over 7,000 in 2013. From 2014 to 2016,
while
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the
number
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of
closures
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decreased to approximately 5,000 stores, exhibiting a significant dip in 2015, the
openings
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stood at 4,000. For the rest of the years, the
number
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of
closures
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remained stable at nearly 5,000 but the
openings
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decreased gradually to 3,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words closures, openings, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dip" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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