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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A small number of
people
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 think that highly trained
professionals
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 should be required to work in the same
country
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 where they did their training, but most
people
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 disagree with
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.
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 disagree, suggesting that they should be free to work where they want.
To begin
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 with, it is understandable that
people
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 might argue in favour of
professionals
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 working in the
country
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 where they trained because in some cases that
country
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 has paid for their training. Take,
for example
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, a doctor who received medical training at the government’s expense in a relatively poor
country
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. If they moved to another
country
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, perhaps in order to earn a higher salary,
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 the government’s investment would have been wasted.
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, there are a few problems with that viewpoint. First of all,
professionals
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 of
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 nature usually pay for their own education, and so if they were required to stay in that
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 it would be unfair. A lot of
people
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 invest in their education purely to gain the chance
of moving
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to move
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 to another
country
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 for a better life.
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, of course, there is the argument that all
people
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 should have some freedom of movement. Particularly in the case of highly trained
professionals
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, who can bring value to different societies, it is beneficial to have them move around the world, sharing their skills and increasing diversity. Perhaps they ought to give something back to the society in which they were trained, but they should not be restricted by any law because that would be a violation of their fundamental rights. In conclusion,
people
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 who have important skills should be free to move to other countries if they wish. They should not have a legal obligation to stay in the nation where they earned their skills, but perhaps for the sake of
decency
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 they might consider staying a short
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 and giving back to that society.

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relevant specific examples
Try to include more specific examples to support your points. While the example of a doctor trained at the government’s expense was effective, adding more variety would strengthen the argument.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ensure your ideas are thoroughly developed. Expanding on the impact of professional migration on both the home and host countries can provide additional depth.
task achievement
You presented both viewpoints clearly and provided a well-supported opinion.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction and conclusion are effectively written and give a solid structure to your essay.
logical structure
Your essay is logically structured with clear and cohesive paragraphs.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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