Some people feel that learning a foreign languageis an essential component of a child's education. Others feel that learning a foreign language is often a waste of time that can be better spent on learning technologyand other vocational subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
this
day and age, several schools around the world always focus on
language
subjects
and vocational
subjects
.
However
, some
people
think that
language
subjects
do not impact
children
when compared with
technology
and vocational because nowadays is a globalization era. In my opinion, both
subjects
are essential for living as well and it depends on what
children
are interested in and their future work.
To begin
with, a foreign
language
is better to know a foreign
language
than a mother
language
even if it isn't used much in daily
life
it enhances communication capabilities.
Furthermore
, it can used to make friends with other countries not only in their home countries and it is
also
easy to have a connection with a lot of
people
.
In addition
, foreign languages are related to numerous jobs
for instance
, ambassador, pilot, air hostess and even engineer because is have to communicate with other
people
as mentioned on top and when they have a chance to work in foreign countries is most impactful with their
life
and work.
On the other hand
,
technology
and vocational
subjects
are
also
important because in
this
generation
technology
is developing the world and today's large of
people
use
technology
in daily
life
and currently have plenty of careers. Even so, vocational
subjects
and
technology
can be good choices for
children
who have a passion for it.
Moreover
, some
children
that interested in
technology
in the future may be their can create new machines or materials that can affect with education system or any system
likewise
, vocational
subjects
that good for
children
who early know about their passion for any career.
To sum up
, every subject is important for
life
and it depends on
children
's interests . Meanwhile, parents should support even
children
who have a passion different from their own view because the main essential is support from family.
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The essay responds to the task and discusses both views adequately but could provide a clearer stance. Make sure to explicitly state your opinion and ensure it is evident throughout your essay.
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The logical structure is generally clear, but make sure to avoid some repetition and maintain flow between paragraphs. Use transitional words or phrases to improve coherence.
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Try to provide more specific examples that clearly support your main points. This will create stronger arguments and demonstrate in-depth understanding of the topic.
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Review grammar and vocabulary usage to reduce errors. This will make your arguments more compelling and easier to understand. Consider simplifying longer sentences for clarity.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and summarize the essay's main points.
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The essay considers both views on the topic, which helps in presenting a balanced discussion.
coherence cohesion
There is an understanding of the basic requirements of essay organization, with distinct paragraphs for different points.
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