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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the
consuming
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consumption
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 habits of
coffee
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 and tea among people across 5 Australian
cities
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. Generally speaking, cafes were the most popular locations for people getting their
drink
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drinks
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 in all
cities
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 except
Adelaide
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,
which
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where
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 the option was significantly prioritised by consumers over fresh
coffee
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. In Australian
cities
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 on the list
except
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Adelaide
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 at around 49%, most customers (55%-65%) have chosen to purchase their drink in
coffee
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 shops, with
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 a trend more significant in Brisbane,
Adelaide
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 and Hobart where they have more than doubled the percentage of people prefer fresh
coffee
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. Ranging between 45% and 55%, Instant
coffee
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were
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 the second most popular option among
coffee
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 lovers in all listed
cities
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 except
Adelaide
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, where the
preferece
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preference
 overtook cafes by around 1%. As the least common choice for getting
a
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tea or
coffee
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, fresh
coffee
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 only accounted for less than 35% in Brisbane and
Adelaide
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.
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 Sydneysiders were most supportive
to purchase
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of purchasing
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 fresh
coffee
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 for
cousmption
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consumption
 among the others, the option still fell behind
coffee
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 shops for around one-third at 43%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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