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The map below is of the town of Galrsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Galrsdon. A new supermarket is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided map illustrates the town of Garlsdon with two prospected sites for
Supermarket
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Supermarkets
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, which
completed
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are completed
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 with its nearby
towns
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town
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 population and
general
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a general
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 picture of the
area
 types.
Overall
,
the
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Garlsdon has three types of
area
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areas
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 which are town centre, housing
area
, industry
area
, and countryside. The
Supermarket
 has been planned to build
on
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in
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 the countryside or
towncentre
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town centre
town-centre
.
Although
, both of the sites are near
to
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the railway line. The first
Supermarket
 site option is
on
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in
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 the north-west of Garlsdon countryside, which
near
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is near
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to
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Hindon with
10.000
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a 10.000
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 population.
This
area
 can
be reach
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be reached
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 by
commuter
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commuters
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, but have no direct access to main roads. Despite the town
center
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centre
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 is no traffic zone, the next option is to build the
Supermarket
 in it.
This
 site is accessible by railway and direct main roads, where the first main road leads to Bransdon
that
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located in the south-west and the other
on
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one
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 leads to Cransdon in the south-east.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words supermarket, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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