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a museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some vulntary unpaid work at the museum. write a letter to the museum director to apply to the voluntary unpaid work. in your later. explain why you want to do voluntary unpaid work at the museu,. describe some eskill and qualities you have that would be useful. give detail of when you would be available for work.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding the part-time position available at the Museum of Contemporaneous Art. My name is Gonzalo Ezequiel Fuentes, a contemporary arts student and
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 an entrepreneur artist. First of all, I am a contemporaneous artist who has dedicated my life to keeping art alive, at the moment,
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 being in the
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 semester of my career, less physical presence at the university is required. I have some free time during my afternoons, so I believe that a part-time position would suit me perfectly.
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, I will explain why
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 position would line up with my skills and experience in
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 area. As a contemporaneous artist, I have developed plenty of skills and knowledge in
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 topic so I could guide the visitors and explain every sector of the museum. I hope to hear back from you soon. I would very much appreciate your consideration of my application. Yours faithfully, Gonzalo E Fuentes

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task achievement
You have successfully addressed the main points of the task. However, try to elaborate more on your skills and how they are specifically relevant to the museum work. Also, provide more specific details about your availability to make your letter more compelling.
coherence cohesion
While your letter is cohesive and logical, make sure to utilize transition words to enhance the flow between paragraphs. Additionally, check for grammatical errors to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to proofread your letter for any spelling errors or typos, such as 'vulntary,' 'museum,', and 'contemporaneous.' Correct spelling will enhance the overall impression of your letter.
task achievement
Your writing tone is polite and suitable for a formal letter, which strengthens your application.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your letter is well-organized with clear paragraphs, making it easy to follow your thoughts.
coherence cohesion
You have effectively included both a greeting and closing, maintaining the formal letter structure.
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