The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
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The charts illuminate the variation in ownership of electrical appliances and
duration
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the duration
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of time spent doing housework in household chores.
Overall
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, the comparison between trends, in terms which are given with
percentage
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percentages
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and numbers, are elaborated
due to
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the
country
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country's
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approximately 5 decades, between 1920 and 2019. In the first diagram,
it is clear that
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electrical devices used to
prefer
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preferred
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less than
the
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in the
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next years. The
using
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use of
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washing
machine
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machines
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gradually rose to nearly three-fifths in 2019. The requisites of the refrigerator and vacuum cleaner peaked dramatically throughout the mentioned years. The consumption of fridge and vacuum cleaner in the cleaning contained respectively zero and less than a third. The second diagram consists of numbers which give elaborated information about the
hours
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of washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning per person during a week. The
hours
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which were
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spent on housework in 1920 were really higher than
2019
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in 2019
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,
account
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accounting
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for 50
hours
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per week.
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, the figure fell steeply by nearly 10
hours
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in 2019. (A.X.)
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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