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Your friend is thinking about learning to drive and would like some advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say why a driving licence is advantageous • recommend a driving school • give any extra guidance/tips

#friend #drive #advice #licence #school #guidance #tips
Dear Samuel, I hope you are doing well
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 And your trip to Kenya was splendid.With the current transportation crisis in the city at the moment
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 am glad you have bought your personal
car
 now to ease your movement around town.But it is advantageous you get your driving licence from the
road
 transport authority office.
This
 will serve as a legal document which explains that you understand how to drive and understand all the
road
 signs
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 in driving in the country to avoid
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issues
 with the police.
Also
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 recommend you go to Christex driving school along
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road
 for
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training
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, it is the best driving school around with qualified trainers.They offer both manual and automatic
car
 training and will teach you everything about a
car
 and the driving laws.They
also
 teach about
road
 signs and
car
 warning signs.
Furthermore
,when driving you should be very fucus on the
road
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 around Dalanda
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 and
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 environs as the
road
 is very bad with a lot of
pot holes
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. wishing you success
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 your driving training and assessment. Warmest regards, Rokeeb
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to use paragraphs to separate different ideas and make your letter more readable. For instance, you could have separate paragraphs for the advantages of having a driving license, recommendation of the driving school, and additional guidance/tips.
task achievement
Ensure to proofread and correct minor grammatical errors, such as 'isssues' which should be 'issues' and 'fucus' which should be 'focus'.
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The letter answers all parts of the prompt: advantages of having a driving license, recommendation of a driving school, and additional tips for driving.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Greeting and closing are appropriately used, making the letter feel personal and complete.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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