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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
#enquiries #tourist #information #office #city #period #features #comparisons
The line graph illustrates the information that number of
enquiries
 received by three various
mode
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modes
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 of communication
such
 as in person, by letter/email and by
telephone
 at
tourist
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the tourist
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 information office
at
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in
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 a city over a
six month
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six-month
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 period from
January
 to
June
in
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apply
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2011.
Overall
, the office received the most
enquiries
 by
in person
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in-person
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 mode of communication and the least
enquiries
was
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were
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the
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apply
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by
telephone
. In detail,
in
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at
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 the beginning of the period, which is
January
enquiries
was
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were
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 around 410
by
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per
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 person and it
was
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increased slightly by 200 from
february
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February
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 to match
then
 it doubled by 400 from match until
may
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May
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, it
was
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reached the highest number of
enquiries
 in
June
 month, which is 1900.
Furthermore
,
on
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in
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January
, by letter/ email and by
telephone
 had 700 and 900
enquiries
 respectively. After that by letter/email was decreased mildly until
march
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March
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, at 650 and there was a gradual shrink from match to
may
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May
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, from 650 to 370 and it remained stable until
may
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May
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.
In contrast
,
by
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telephone
enquiries
was
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were
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 the highest number of
enquiries
 than others in
January
, at 900 and there was a
fluctation
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fluctuation
 and up and down trend from
January
 to match, from 900 to 1000, it remained stable until April, at 1000. There was a moderate increase from April to
June
 and it
was
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reached 1600
on
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in
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June
 month.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words enquiries, telephone, january, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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