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The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.

The charts below show the results of a survey conducted by a university library to find out the opinions of full-time and part-time students about its services.
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The given diagrams illustrate the satisfaction of full-time and part-time
students
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 in percentages with the technological
support
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 supplied by a university and the working time.
Overall
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, most of the
students
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,
both
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 full-time and part-time, are very satisfied with the opening hours
whereas
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 more full-time
students
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 feel very happy with the help from IT supporters of the college, compared with part-time ones.
Moreover
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, it is obvious from the charts that opening hours
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 of more favour compared to IT
support
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. Looking at the charts about satisfaction proportion in technological assistance, it can be seen that most full-time
students
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 feel very pleased and quite pleased with that
support
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, at 55% and 32%, respectively. Only 13% of full-time ones feel unpleased with the aid.
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, nearly half of the part-time apprentices are not satisfied with the help from the IT team, at 45%, which is followed by the rate of learners who think the help is quite useful, at 35%,
while
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 only 20% of them believe that the assistance is very useful. It is apparent that more full-time
students
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 are happy with the IT
support
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 compared with the part-time ones. Regarding the current working time, the majority of
both
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 full-time and part-time
students
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 feel very satisfied with it, at 67% and 72%, respectively. The proportion of quite satisfied learners is 32% with the prior and 23% with the latter,
whereas
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 the rate of
students
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 who are unhappy at all in
both
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 groups is insignificant, not pass 5% in
both
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. Obviously, more
students
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 are satisfied with opening hours compared with IT
support
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, support, both with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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