Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's character and culture from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
argue that they can possibly tell other
people
's
character
and
culture
based on their
clothes
.
However
, I disagree with
this
statement because their chosen
clothes
only represent their
fashion
preference but not
representing
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represent
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someone's
culture
or
character
. First of all, determining
people
's
character
can be seen by observing their attitude or
on
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apply
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how they talk. In fact, talking will intrigue someone to give
opinion
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an opinion
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;
thus
,
people
can understand others' thinking way to react
about
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apply
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the
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apply
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certain things.
Moreover
, their attitude may represent their
character
as well which can be observed from their body language and
voce
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voice
vocal
intonation.
For example
, when
people
want to decide
their
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on their
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president during
election
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the election
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, they always watch their candidates to have a debate or speech in order to observe every
candidates'
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candidate's
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character
.
Furthermore
,
clothes
can only represent
people
's
fashion
preference
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preferences
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instead
of their
character
. It is because
people
wear certain
clothes
based on their
ocassion
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occasion
location
and situation. In fact,
Fashion
may be influenced by certain
culture
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cultures
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, but it only applies
in
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to
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some events that are related to their
culture
.
For example
, when
balinese
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Balinese
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women would like to have a
pray
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prayer
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in their temple, they usually wear their traditional
clothes
called Kebaya. But, they will change their
clothes
if they decide to have travelling with
more
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a more
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comfortable
fashion
like short pants and
t-shirts
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T-shirts
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. In conclusion, some
people
cannot judge others'
character
and
culture
based on what they wear because
clothes
are usually chosen based on the
ocassions
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occasion
occasions
. One of the
way
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ways
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that can determine
people
's
character
is when seeing someone talking because we can observe from their way of thinking, expression, and their body
langauge
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language
.
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