Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's character and culture from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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argue that they can possibly tell other
people
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's
character
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and
culture
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based on their
clothes
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.
However
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, I disagree with
this
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statement because their chosen
clothes
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only represent their
fashion
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preference but not
representing
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represent
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someone's
culture
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or
character
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. First of all, determining
people
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's
character
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can be seen by observing their attitude or
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apply
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how they talk. In fact, talking will intrigue someone to give
opinion
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an opinion
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;
thus
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,
people
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can understand others' thinking way to react
about
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apply
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the
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apply
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certain things.
Moreover
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, their attitude may represent their
character
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as well which can be observed from their body language and
voce
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voice
vocal
intonation.
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, when
people
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want to decide
their
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on their
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president during
election
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the election
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, they always watch their candidates to have a debate or speech in order to observe every
candidates'
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candidate's
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character
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.
Furthermore
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,
clothes
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can only represent
people
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's
fashion
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preference
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preferences
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instead
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of their
character
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. It is because
people
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wear certain
clothes
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based on their
ocassion
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occasion
location
and situation. In fact,
Fashion
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may be influenced by certain
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culture
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cultures
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, but it only applies
in
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to
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some events that are related to their
culture
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.
For example
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, when
balinese
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Balinese
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women would like to have a
pray
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prayer
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in their temple, they usually wear their traditional
clothes
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called Kebaya. But, they will change their
clothes
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if they decide to have travelling with
more
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a more
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comfortable
fashion
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like short pants and
t-shirts
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T-shirts
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. In conclusion, some
people
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cannot judge others'
character
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and
culture
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based on what they wear because
clothes
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are usually chosen based on the
ocassions
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occasion
occasions
. One of the
way
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ways
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that can determine
people
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's
character
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is when seeing someone talking because we can observe from their way of thinking, expression, and their body
langauge
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language
.
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