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The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below provide information on popular modes of transport in the city of Cambridge for the years 2008 and 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie graph illustrates data about the different kinds of transportation in Cambridge in two years ( 2008 and 2018.
Overall
, the number of
cars
 was the most popular in the first year,
while
 used
bicycles
was
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were
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 the highest in the final year.
Furthermore
, the popularity of walking and
bicycles
 increased
significatly
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significantly
 as opposed to
cars
 and buses which decreased. In 2006, people in Cambridge were
prefering
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preferring
cars
 more than
others
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other
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 transportation nearly
a
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apply
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half
overall
, and the second most popular mode of
traveling
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 was by buses with third .
However
, the number of
bicycles
 was nearly a fifth and walking was the least 11%.
On the other hand
, the
perecntage
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percentage
 of
bicycles
 doubled to 30% and became the most popular in 2018,
likewise
, the percentage of walking increased dramatically to a quarter, which was the second most popular transportation .
In contrast
, the percentage of both
cars
 and buses dropped to 25% in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, bicycles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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