The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts
an information
Remove the article
information
a piece of information
show examples
about salary comparison,
while
the table illustrates
average
Add an article
the average
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working
of
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apply
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hours
per
week
for each
professions
Change to a singular noun
profession
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.
Overall
it can be seen that the chart and the table have
similarity
Fix the agreement mistake
similarities
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on
Change preposition
in
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the type of jobs,
such
as police, nurse, firefighter, and underground driver.
Firstly
, in the first year, the police will get
salaries
around
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of around
show examples
21000
pounds
. After that, the
salaries
will increase up to 20 per cent or 23000
pounds
.
In addition
, at
first,
the nurses can gain
salaries
until
Change preposition
up to
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18000
pounds
. Afterwards, the
salaries
will be higher at 19000
pounds
. Same as nurses, firefighters only can achieve 10
per cent
Correct your spelling
per cent per cent
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than
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of
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their first
salaries
Fix the agreement mistake
salary
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, which is 40000
pounds
.
Last
Correct article usage
The last
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occupation, underground drivers when they
are entering
Wrong verb form
entered
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their job, the salary was 50000
then
will rise
Wrong verb form
rose
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to 51000
pounds
. Move to the table,
police
Correct article usage
the police
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has
Change the verb form
have
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40
hours
per
week
to work.
On the other hand
, the nurse
have
Change the verb form
has
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to spend their time a
week
until 38
hours
.
Moreover
, firefighter has work
hours
up to 55 a
week
.
Lastly
, underground drivers
become
Verb problem
have
show examples
the least work
hours
with about 38
hours
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, salaries, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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