The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts
an information
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information
a piece of information
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about salary comparison,
while
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the table illustrates
average
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the average
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working
of
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apply
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hours
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per
week
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for each
professions
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profession
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.
Overall
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it can be seen that the chart and the table have
similarity
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similarities
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on
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in
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the type of jobs,
such
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as police, nurse, firefighter, and underground driver.
Firstly
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, in the first year, the police will get
salaries
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around
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of around
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21000
pounds
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. After that, the
salaries
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will increase up to 20 per cent or 23000
pounds
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.
In addition
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, at
first,
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the nurses can gain
salaries
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until
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up to
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18000
pounds
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. Afterwards, the
salaries
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will be higher at 19000
pounds
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. Same as nurses, firefighters only can achieve 10
per cent
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per cent per cent
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than
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of
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their first
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salaries
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salary
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, which is 40000
pounds
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.
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Last
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The last
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occupation, underground drivers when they
are entering
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entered
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their job, the salary was 50000
then
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will rise
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rose
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to 51000
pounds
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. Move to the table,
police
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the police
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has
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have
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40
hours
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per
week
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to work.
On the other hand
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, the nurse
have
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has
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to spend their time a
week
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until 38
hours
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.
Moreover
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, firefighter has work
hours
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up to 55 a
week
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.
Lastly
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, underground drivers
become
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have
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the least work
hours
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with about 38
hours
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, salaries, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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