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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task : Email has had a huge impact on professional and social communication, but its impact has been negative as well as positive. Do the advantages of using e-mail outweigh the disadvantages ? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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It is certainly true that the use of
e-mail
 has greatly changed the way we communicate with each other at work
as well as
 socially.
While
 it is true that the effects of
this
 innovation
has
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have
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 not always been positive, I do think that
advantages
Correct article usage
the advantages
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 of using
email
 are more than its drawbacks. (53 words) It is no doubt that
email
 has brought important benefits. One
such
 advantage of using
e-mail
 is that it is a fast and easy way to communicate with family, friends and work colleagues wherever they are in the world. It not only allows people to stay in touch with each other, but it
also
 allows them to send all kinds of information
such
 as pictures, photos, diagrams and texts very quickly, cheaply and with a very good quality of reproduction.
This
 is a huge advance on earlier communication systems, and the low cost of
e-mail
 means it is very widely used. (100 words) In spite of the above positive effects,
email
 has brought some negative aspects as well. A common criticism of
this
 technology is that it causes extra work and stress.
This
 is because employees receive more messages than they can answer every day and since
email
 writers expect a quick response,
this
further
 increases pressure on employees. Other objections to
email
 for both social and professional users include the way it encourages people to spend even longer at their computers and
also
 the danger of incoming messages allowing viruses into your computer system. (92 words)
To sum up
, even though there are some obvious drawbacks to using
email
,
this
 fast and user-friendly technology has greatly improved our ability to communicate both professionally and socially.
Therefore
, I think
e-mail
 has brought us many more benefits than disadvantages. (
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Consider expanding on specific examples to further strengthen your arguments. For instance, mentioning particular situations or studies could add more depth to your discussion.
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Ensure a balanced discussion by providing more detailed counterpoints to the disadvantages. This can make your argument more compelling and comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear and well-defined structure, with distinct paragraphs separated for introduction, main points, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
The language used is appropriate and there is a good variety in sentence structure, making the essay engaging to read.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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