The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The map demonstrates the changes
of
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construction on an island for tourist entertainment.
Overall
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, multiple changes have
occured
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occurred
on
an
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the
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island. There have been built a hotel for
relaxing
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a relaxing
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vacation. Before
to
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apply
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the construction of the building,
island
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the island
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was
tottaly
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totally
empty. There
was
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were
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no structures
and
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or
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other places where visitors could have their vacation. After some time, a piece of land surrounded by water was developed into
huge
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a huge
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infrastructure with incredible convenience to have a great rest. Later after coming to the pier, we can
directy
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directly
see the reception where people can take the Keys to the rooms. In the west and east
conner
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corner
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of the place,
there's
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there are
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accommodations where the guests can stay.
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, behind the
reception
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reception,
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there is a restaurant where people can get food. On the western edge of town, there's a beach where they can relax and swim.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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