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Topic: The graph bellow gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Topic: The graph bellow gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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The graph illustrates the percentage of the
population
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 living in urban areas in four Southeast Asian countries—Philippines,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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, and
Indonesia
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—between 1970 and 2020, with projections for 2030 and 2040. In 1970, the urban
population
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 was lowest in
Indonesia
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, at approximately 15%,
while
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Malaysia
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, the Philippines, and
Thailand
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 were around 30%.
Malaysia
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's urban
population
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 surged rapidly, surpassing 70% by 2020 and is projected to reach 80% by 2040. The Philippines
also
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 saw a steady increase, rising to 50% in 2020, and is expected to grow to around 60% by 2040.
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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 both saw moderate
growth
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 in urbanization.
Thailand
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's urban
population
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, which was slightly higher than
Indonesia
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's in 1970, reached about 40% by 2020, with projections to increase to around 50% by 2040.
Indonesia
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, despite its slower initial
growth
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, is expected to see significant increases, from 15% in 1970 to over 50% by 2040.
Overall
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,
Malaysia
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 experienced the most significant increase in urban
population
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 over the period and is projected to continue leading in urbanization by 2040.
In contrast
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,
Indonesia
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,
while
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 starting at the lowest percentage, shows steady
growth
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 and is expected to see a substantial rise by 2040. The Philippines and
Thailand
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 both exhibit moderate and consistent
growth
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 in urbanization.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, malaysia, thailand, indonesia, growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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