The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart and graph illustrate information about the
joiners
who have participated in the Olympics since it began. In general, the
number
of
participants
in the competition was increased from 1924 to 2012. By the way, the
number
of males is always higher than females. Having looked at the bar chart, we can see that the
number
of female
participants
in 1924 was the lowest at around 100; meanwhile, the
number
of male
joiners
was higher than females at around 3000. Between 1952 and 1984, the
number
of male
joiners
had a slight increase from 4500 to 5100 and the
number
of female
joiners
increased from 600 to 1500 respectively. In 2012, the
number
of male
participants
increased and reached its highest point at around 6000 and the
number
of females significantly grew and reached its highest
number
at around 4600. Regarding the line graph, the
number
of
participants
at around 3000 in the first year before rising to 5000 in 1952. Between 1984 and 2012 the
number
of
participants
still increased from 6500 to 10500 and reached the highest point in the
last
year. Thanks to the continuous fluctuation, the
number
of
participants
has jumped impressively from 3000 to 10500.
Besides
that, we can see the
number
of male
participants
is always higher than female
joiners
in each year.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words joiners, number, participants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 12 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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