Multinational companies are becoming increasingly common in developing countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

International companies are being built in poor
countries
more often over
last
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decades.
This
phenomenon can be advantageous in some aspects
such
as more occupation for locals and the economic profit for their government.
However
, the downsides can not be underestimated and concerns have been raised
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the abuse that uneducated workers are facing and the cultures' mixture. On the one hand, more job opportunities for local people would be accessible and the hiring chance would
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. Living in some nations, in which the economy is weak and the inflammation is considerable, is unsufferable for their citizens. They mostly have monetary struggles so having job
saftey
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safety
and continuous income, which these
factories
offer to their employees, are the two primary solutions.
In addition
, If the host
countries
get
taxes
of
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these firms, their economy would increasingly glow over the following decades. The
authorties
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authorities
should monitor these
factories
' financial activity and require them to pay
taxes
every month based on their income and sales.
Consequently
, the
taxes
can be used in order to build and grow national
factories
so the country would earn
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budget independently. Hong Kong is a great example
for
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this
sentiment. They impose high
taxes
on international successful
conglamorations
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collaborations
conglomerations
and use it for Hong Kong's own sake.
On the other hand
, the
conglamorations
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conglomerations
pay
less
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wages to the local employees compared to what they have to pay in modern
countries
. Some would argue that it is legalized slavery in the
21th
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century
that is
not moral nor compatible
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human rights.
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Moreover
, the foreign culture might ruin the
hosts'
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as they have unsupervised and uncontrolled interaction.
This
can lead to
destructive
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knock-on effect on
host
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country's citizens because they are not educated in school about the consequences and are not aware enough.
For example
, about half a century ago, many American
bussinesses
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businesses
were active in Iran and since
then
, the fashion sense of
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have been
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changed as they got affected
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foreigners
and
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furthermore
, the traditional clothing that was a treasure for every nation has been forgotten. In conclusion,
factories
with
multinationality
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multinational
multi nationality
management might have
benefits
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the benefits
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of increasing hiring
rate
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rates
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in third-world
countries
and being financially helpful toward the nation's operators. Despite
this
, the negative sides must
also
be valued. The working
forces
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aren't getting paid enough and the cultural exchange might be hurtful without
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changing
the education system in schools.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Multinational corporations (MNCs)
  • Foreign direct investment (FDI)
  • Developing economies
  • Infrastructure development
  • Capacity building
  • Cultural diversity
  • Sustainability
  • Corporate social responsibility (CSR)
  • Technological transfer
  • Economic disparity
  • Market saturation
  • Brain drain
  • Indigenous industries
  • Expatriate management
  • Trade imbalance
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