Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some would argue that the biggest environmental problem is the extinction of many
species
of plants and animals, Use synonyms
while
others say that there are more important problems like Linking Words
air
pollution and global warming. Use synonyms
While
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of diversity of Use synonyms
species
can be a very serious problem, I believe that global warming and Use synonyms
air
pollution together make up a more significant trouble.
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loss
of only Use synonyms
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species
can impact the local ecosystem in a bad way. Because all animals and plants take an important role in a local ecosystem. If we take out only Use synonyms
one
from the local system, it will break the whole food chain. Use synonyms
For example
, in the 20th Linking Words
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local people from Add a comma
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one
village in Uzbekistan destroyed all sparrows in the surrounding area. Lately, it caused an overpopulation of insects, which destroyed a harvest of wheat. Use synonyms
However
, I think that even if the Linking Words
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species
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a big trouble, global warming and Linking Words
air
pollution cause more problems, including the Use synonyms
loss
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species
.
In recent decades, humanity started to pollute the Use synonyms
air
very intensively. With Use synonyms
development
of global Add an article
the development
industrialization
a lot of fabrics have been built around the world. Add a comma
industrialization,
Furthermore
, in modern times almost every family has their own car. Adding all of these factors, we have an increasing average temperature around the Earth, which impacts to climate and can destroy a lot of unique ecosystems and local flora and fauna. Linking Words
For example
, the changing climate at the North Pole caused a melting of icebergs, which resulted in increasing in ocean water levels and the extinction of polar bears.
In conclusion, despite the lack of diversity of animals and plants being a very serious problem, there is Linking Words
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another trouble, which humanity faced in the Linking Words
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