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"vaping products should be totally banned in Ireland." Do you agree or diagree with this statement? Explain your answer.

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Nowadays, in a world with new modern technologies, many products now have an alternative and cigarettes are an example of
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 with the new attention to the e-cigarettes which are called vapes.
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, the main reason for
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 new product was to encourage smokers to quit as
people
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 believe that it is less harmful to our
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 , unlike regular cigarettes which are known to contain many different chemicals. And many individuals think vaping should be banned in Ireland. In
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 essay, I will discuss why vaping should be completely banned in the country.
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 with, many countries tried to ban smoking products in the
last
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 few years because of the great harmful effects on their citizens and
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 of the huge cost to the
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 care system. Some of them achieved that after a long discussion between the government and the manufacturers, which ended with finding a new solution or a new product that can help
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 to quit smoking and it was vaping.
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, the purpose of vapes was to reduce the number of smokers
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eventually it increased them and most of the users are teenagers.
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, teenagers believe that vaping makes them look cool which is why they are the biggest proportion of vapers around the world.
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, Vapes were originally made to help adult smokers quit traditional cigarettes, vaping has
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 become a common habit among teenagers. Many young
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 are drawn to vaping
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 attractive flavours, and peer pressure, believing it to be less harmful.
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, the reality is that vape liquid has a high amount of addictive substances like nicotine, which can harm their physical and mental
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. Ireland will have a new generation with many serious
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 issues, including respiratory problems, and heart disease. Addressing
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 issue now is critical to protect the
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 and future of young
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 in the country. In conclusion, I believe vaping should be banned not only in Ireland but worldwide. And countries must launch campaigns to raise awareness about its dangers and promote a healthier society.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Vaping products
  • Total ban
  • Respiratory issues
  • Nicotine addiction
  • Enforcement
  • Black market
  • Nicotine
  • Tobacco control
  • Smoking cessation
  • Regulation
  • Public health
  • Economic impact
  • Policy comparison
  • Youth vulnerability
  • Addictive substances
  • Alternative solutions
  • Health risks
  • Illegal sales
  • Safer alternative
  • Nicotine replacement therapy
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