The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia's share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart illustrates the number of

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people who travelled to other countries from 1985 to 1995,

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the graph shows the percentage of

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who chose Australia as a destination during the same period. The initial expression is that not only the numbers

traveling

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abroad were increased by

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Japanese’s

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people but

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there was

strong

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a strong

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rise in the percentage of

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travelers

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to Australia. As can be seen in the bar chart, the

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of

traveling

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were

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started by almost 5

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in 1985 which had a

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growth of approximately 2

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per year until 1990 when the number of overseas

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arrived

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11

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.

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it experienced a slight fall of just over 10

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,

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before it started to

recovered

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again at nearly 16

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of the period.

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the line graph, prior to 1985, the proportion of

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tourist

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tourists

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to Australia was zero,

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by 1985, there was a notable improvement of just under 5% for about 4 consecutive years. In 1989, it had a sharp increase in 1993 when it peaked at just over 6

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. Despite

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, there was a slight decrease

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last

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year

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reached

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by

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exactly 5

million

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at the end

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of the period.