Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In our
world
there are a lot of bad things. Add a comma
world,
This
things affects
our life Correct subject-verb agreement
affect
crimes
is of these things. Some people
think this
is Correct article usage
a resulte
resulte
Correct your spelling
result
resulted
resulting
from
social Change preposition
of
problems
and poverty while
others disagree and think it is Correct article usage
the results
results
of childhood trauma and human nature. Fix the agreement mistake
result
This
essay will discuss both points of view and give a clear opinion
First of all, poverty and social problems
are
may lead to Unnecessary verb
apply
crimes
. to explain that. Some people
whom
Change the pronoun
who
living
in poverty Wrong verb form
live
they
can’t afford education Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
their children and a clean environment Change preposition
for
to
Change preposition
apply
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
in addition
to that. Social problems
can lead to crimes
for
example
. Drugs
and alcohol can lead to violence and depression specially
between families, Replace the word
especially
for instance
, some parents have addiction
to Add an article
an addiction
drugs
or alcohol can
sometimes be aggressive Correct word choice
and can
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
leads
to serious Wrong verb form
leading
crimes
On the other hand
. Some people
are bad in nature. in other words
. People
who born
to be criminals Add a missing verb
were born
as
Correct your spelling
an
Add an article
an example
example
Fix the agreement mistake
examples
for
Change preposition
apply
that
Correct word choice
and
some
children who always Correct quantifier usage
apply
who always
fight with strangers Remove the redundancy
apply
with
no reason, as an Change preposition
for
example
for that . Children Bullying and and
violence in schools between teenagers. Not only thatRemove the redundancy
apply
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
some people
have criminal mind
as an Fix the agreement mistake
minds
example
for that , some research shows that criminal mind
and mental illness. To give a clear Fix the agreement mistake
minds
example
some experts found that criminal
mind can be found Correct article usage
a criminal
on
the DNA .
By way of conclusion, after a detailed analysis of both points of Change preposition
in
views
, I believe that Fix the agreement mistake
view
crimes
are committed by people
with social problems
. such
as,
mental illness and Remove the comma
apply
drugs
addiction it is the most common Change the noun form
drug
causes
since Fix the agreement mistake
cause
drugs
and alcohol causes
serious mental health issues and Correct subject-verb agreement
cause
controls
the ability to deal with Correct subject-verb agreement
control
problems
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task response
Your essay addresses the primary aspects of the question, but you need to expand your arguments with more detailed explanations and examples. For instance, when discussing how poverty leads to crime, you could add specific examples or case studies to strengthen your argument.
coherence couhesion
Some parts of your essay are difficult to follow due to grammatical errors and sentence structure. Focus on improving sentence clarity and grammar to make your arguments more compelling. You can also use linking words to create smoother transitions between points and paragraphs.
introduction conclusion present
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow your points more easily.
relevant specific examples
You have made an effort to provide relevant examples, which helps to illustrate your points. For example, mentioning drug addiction and its link to crime provides a concrete detail to your argument.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:
...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?
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