The bar chart bellow shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart bellow shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The displayed bar chart illustrates the leading nations in
electricity
generation and expenditure for the year 2014. As an
overall
trend, in terms of
electricity
production
and consumption,
China
emerged
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predominant nation.
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Conversely
, Korea Rep. ranked at the bottom among the ten countries in 2014 in both generation and utilization of
electricity
. Significantly,
China
and the USA had the highest
electricity
production
.
China
produced 5398
billion
kwh
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kWh
while
USA
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the USA
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closely followed with 4099
billion
kwh
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kWh
of
electricity
. Russia and Japan showed comparable
production
figures standing at 1057
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billion
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kwh
and
937billion
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937 billion
kwh
. France, Brazil and Germany recorded nearly the same
electricity
evolution, averaging over 500
billion
kwh
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kWh
each.
In contrast
,
Korea
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Korean
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Republic had the lowest
production
about 485
billion
kwh
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kWh
.
On the other hand
,
China
and the United States again led the way in terms of
electricity
usage
as
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5322
billion
kwh
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kWh
and 3866
billion
kwh
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kWh
,
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although
both nations consumed less than they produced.
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Noticeably
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, Germany stood out as the only country with expenditure exceeded
production
, producing 528
billion
kwh
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kWh
and consuming 583
billion
kwh
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kWh
.
Finally
,
Korea
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Korean
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Republic reported the least
electricity
usage just surpassing 450
billion
kwh
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kWh
in 2014.
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