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The bar chart bellow shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart bellow shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The displayed bar chart illustrates the leading nations in
electricity
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 generation and expenditure for the year 2014. As an
overall
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 trend, in terms of
electricity
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production
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 and consumption,
China
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 emerged
the
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 predominant nation.
Conversly
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Conversely
, Korea Rep. ranked at the bottom among the ten countries in 2014 in both generation and utilization of
electricity
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. Significantly,
China
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 and the USA had the highest
electricity
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production
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.
China
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 produced 5398
billion
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kwh
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kWh
while
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USA
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the USA
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 closely followed with 4099
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 of
electricity
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. Russia and Japan showed comparable
production
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 figures standing at 1057
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billion
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kwh
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 and
937billion
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937 billion
kwh
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. France, Brazil and Germany recorded nearly the same
electricity
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 evolution, averaging over 500
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kwh
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kWh
 each.
In contrast
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,
Korea
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Korean
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 Republic had the lowest
production
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 about 485
billion
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kwh
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kWh
.
On the other hand
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,
China
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 and the United States again led the way in terms of
electricity
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 usage
as
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 5322
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 and 3866
billion
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kwh
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kWh
,
altough
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although
 both nations consumed less than they produced.
Noticablly
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Noticeably
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, Germany stood out as the only country with expenditure exceeded
production
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, producing 528
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 and consuming 583
billion
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kWh
.
Finally
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,
Korea
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Korean
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 Republic reported the least
electricity
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 usage just surpassing 450
billion
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kwh
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kWh
 in 2014.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, china, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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