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The bar chart bellow shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart bellow shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The displayed bar chart illustrates the leading nations in
electricity
 generation and expenditure for the year 2014. As an
overall
 trend, in terms of
electricity
production
 and consumption,
China
 emerged
the
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as the
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 predominant nation.
Conversly
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Conversely
, Korea Rep. ranked at the bottom among the ten countries in 2014 in both generation and utilization of
electricity
. Significantly,
China
 and the USA had the highest
electricity
production
.
China
 produced 5398
billion
kwh
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kWh
while
USA
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the USA
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 closely followed with 4099
billion
kwh
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kWh
 of
electricity
. Russia and Japan showed comparable
production
 figures standing at 1057
billon
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billion
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kwh
 and
937billion
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937 billion
kwh
. France, Brazil and Germany recorded nearly the same
electricity
 evolution, averaging over 500
billion
kwh
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kWh
 each.
In contrast
,
Korea
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Korean
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 Republic had the lowest
production
 about 485
billion
kwh
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kWh
.
On the other hand
,
China
 and the United States again led the way in terms of
electricity
 usage
as
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at
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 5322
billion
kwh
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kWh
 and 3866
billion
kwh
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kWh
,
altough
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although
 both nations consumed less than they produced.
Noticablly
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Noticeably
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, Germany stood out as the only country with expenditure exceeded
production
, producing 528
billion
kwh
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kWh
 and consuming 583
billion
kwh
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kWh
.
Finally
,
Korea
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Korean
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 Republic reported the least
electricity
 usage just surpassing 450
billion
kwh
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kWh
 in 2014.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, production, china, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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