Education is not just a piece of paper - the piece of paper is the representation of
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and qualities of a person .the rate of a
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college is now greater than at almost any point in history. From my perspective, I firmly believe that the
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outweigh the
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.
Despite knowing the benefits of
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a rest between years
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the disadvantages more than
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notion for pupils
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at the same
time
it is
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of
time
.
For example
,
gap
year
waste of
time
and in one
year
students
can spend more
time
with something better
one
year
they will finish 6 subjects .
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time
to take a long rest when they finish a tertiary education.
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in
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age can acquire more skills ,
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and
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complex concepts more quickly for that reason
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learning.
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that , the advantages of
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year
for
students
they will spend more
time
with their families .
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this
year
students
have to exploit their
time
to gain a lot of information about their major and
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for opportunities that can join to a job after they graduate.
they can enjoy and share their
time
with
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.
Moreover
, they should travel abroad to back to university with
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spirit and
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mood. after
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year
they will come back to
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college fresh and energetic again because in the
gap
they do what they want.
In conclusion,
, the notion of a
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year
wasted
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time
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, it is
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for
students
to spend more
time
with their families and practice their hobbies rather
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spending one
year
in university .