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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual ’ income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates data of five groups of households with different annual
income
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incomes
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 in the
years
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 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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number
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a number
the number
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 of families who earned more than 100,000 dollars saw a
slightly
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slight
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 increase threw 2015
reached
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reaching
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 33
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millons
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million
houses
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.
Additionally
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, we can notice that the
number
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 of people with
anuul
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an
 income between 75,000 and 99,999 dollars is the lowest
number
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 with limited change threw the different 3
years
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. Looking
in
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at
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 the data in more detail, the figures
of
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for
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 middle-class
houses
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was
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were
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 the same over the
years
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as
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a
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 little above 20
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millons
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million
millions
houses
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, For
the
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apply
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people with less than 25,000
number
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 of
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houses
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house
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 owners increased by 4
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millons
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million
 in 2011
then
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 slightly decreased to 27
millon
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million
 in 2015.
On the other hand
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number
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 of people
gaind
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gained
gain
 between 25,000 and 49,999
dollors
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dollars
 started
as
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at
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  27
millios
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million
millions
then
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 rose by three
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millons
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million
millions
 in the next four
years
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,
then
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 back to 28
millions
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million
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 in 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, number, millons, houses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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