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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how Olive Oil is manufactured. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below You should write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram below shows how Olive Oil is manufactured. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below You should write at least 150 words
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The diagram provides key information about how to produce Olive
Oil
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 until
to
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it
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sales
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sells
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the diagram that one step is picking and collecting the Olive from the trees.
In addition
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, there are complex steps to making
the
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Olive
Oil
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 ,
whereas
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the
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Olive
Oil
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 has more trees everywhere , especially in North Africa.
According to
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 what is shown, first of all,
collecting
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collect
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 the Olive
then
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 rinsing in
clod
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cold
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 water.
Then
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using
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the machine
to smashing
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smashed
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 the Olive to become
the
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apply
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liquid
oil
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 ,
subsequently
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 producing
into
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apply
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two different shapes
like
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the liquid and
oil
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. The fourth part is putting a bag with holes. In terms of
fifth
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the fifth
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 step, the machine
has pressing
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presses
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 and
separating
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separates
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 them into
oil
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 and water. Eventually, they
wil
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will
moving
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move
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 to storage and sales to
sale
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sell
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 the Olive
Oil
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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