All art needs to be beautiful in order to be valuable. If art is ugly, it is meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
From the very beginning of
the
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human kind
, humans always tried to express their Correct your spelling
humankind
feeling
in a way which reflects their internal feelings, thoughts, passions, and even their problems. Fix the agreement mistake
feelings
Art
was the most understandable method to achieve such
complex
purpose. The nature of Correct article usage
a complex
art
led people with different languages and customs understand
the shadows behind the idea Fix the infinitive
to understand
wich
the artist tried to deliver.
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which
Art
can be done in multiple forms, such
as paintings, music, shows, writings, and also
moves. This
wide range opened the doors for the
people to dive Correct article usage
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in
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in
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this
stage, should all kinds of art
be beautiful? and how to define beautiful in terms of art
output?
Beauty is a concept which is relative and differs from Change the punctuation
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person
to another. A painting with Correct pronoun usage
one person
coloful
themes may be considered to be attractive to someone, Correct your spelling
colourful
however
it may not Add a comma
however,
to
another. In both cases, Add a missing verb
be to
this
painting has an idea which
the artist wanted to transmit to the audience, Correct word choice
that
regardelss
of how the audience received the piece of Correct your spelling
regardless
art
.
The real value of an art
cannot be calculated depending on a pre-defined equation. It's a process where different factors determine if a an
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an
art
is valuable or not. Beauty is one of the most important factors which can in a way say that
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whether
an
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art
is valuable or not. It's clear that not all people will like a symphony, but the symphony
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symphony's
distribuition
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distribution
,
and value will surely depend on how beautiful it Remove the comma
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was
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is
On the other hand
, Correct article usage
a symphony
symphony
internal message and idea Change noun form
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are
on
how much it's loved by the listeners.
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To sum up
, art
is a global communication system between humans, and its value comes from the hidden feelings of the artist whether it is ugly or not.Submitted by jawdat.lubadeh123 on
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