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All art needs to be beautiful in order to be valuable. If art is ugly, it is meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#art
From the very beginning of
the
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human kind
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, humans always tried to express their
feeling
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 in a way which reflects their internal feelings, thoughts, passions, and even their problems.
Art
 was the most understandable method to achieve
such
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 purpose. The nature of
art
 led people with different languages and customs
understand
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 the shadows behind the idea
wich
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 the artist tried to deliver.
Art
 can be done in multiple forms,
such
 as paintings, music, shows, writings, and
also
 moves.
This
 wide range opened the doors for
the
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people to dive
in
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deeply
in
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 the seas of arts. At
this
 stage, should all kinds of
art
 be beautiful? and how to define beautiful in terms of
art
 output
?
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 Beauty is a concept which is relative and differs from
person
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one person
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 to another. A painting with
coloful
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colourful
 themes may be considered to be attractive to someone,
however
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 it may not
to
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 another. In both cases,
this
 painting has an idea
which
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 the artist wanted to transmit to the audience,
regardelss
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regardless
 of how the audience received the piece of
art
. The real value of an
art
 cannot be calculated depending on a pre-defined equation. It's a process where different factors determine if
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art
 is valuable or not. Beauty is one of the most important factors which can in a way say
that
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art
 is valuable or not. It's clear that not all people will like a symphony, but the
symphony
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distribuition
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distribution
,
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 and value will surely depend on how beautiful it
was
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.
On the other hand
,
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symphony
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 internal message and idea
is
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 not related
on
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 how much it's loved by the listeners.
To sum up
,
art
 is a global communication system between humans, and its value comes from the hidden feelings of the artist whether it is ugly or not.
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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea that is fully developed. Some points in your essay remain somewhat vague or generalized. Try to develop your ideas more fully with detailed explanations or specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Work on transitioning smoothly between paragraphs to enhance flow. While your essay is somewhat cohesive, the logical structuring of ideas and arguments could be improved. This will help guide your reader through your essay more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Although your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, expanding your conclusion to include a brief summary of the key points discussed would provide a stronger sense of closure.
introduction conclusion present
Your introduction effectively sets the stage for the discussion and engages the reader by explaining the historical context and the role of art in human expression.
introduction conclusion present
Your conclusion does well to encapsulate the main idea of your argument, providing a clear closing statement on the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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