The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables give information about the temperatures and hours of daylight in London and Sydney during the same weekend in December 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables
graphs
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and graphs
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illustrate data about the temperatures of two cities
London
and
Sydeny
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Sydney
and hours of
sunrise
and
sunset
in the same weekend In December 2018.
Overall
, the temperature in
London
was cooler than in
Sydney
.
While the
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sunrise
in
Sydeny
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Sydney
earlier
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is earlier
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than in
London
and
Sydney
's
sunset
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is latter
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latter
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later
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than
London
's
sunset
. In terms of
London
, the highest
temerature
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temperature
was 13
degree
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degrees
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,
while
the lowest was 3
dgree
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degree
degrees
on
Sunday
29th , which was lower than
Sydney
's temperature.
London
's
sunrise
was at 8:05 a.m. on Friday 28th and rose to 8:06 on
Sunday
30th.
In addition
,
London
's
sunset
time was at 15.57
in
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first
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day and increased to 15:59 on
Sunday
30th. With regards to
Sydney
, it had the highest temperature at 31 degree on
Sunday
30th and the lowset degree was 17 on Friday 28th.
Moreover
,
Sunrise
time of
Sydney
was at 5:45 a.m on Friday 28th, which was earlier than
London
, and it rose only one minute on
Sunday
30th of decembe.
Furthermore
, Syndey daylight ended at 20:06 in first day and increased only one mintute in other days.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words london, sunrise, sunset, sydney, sunday with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • temperatures
  • hours of daylight
  • comparison
  • London
  • Sydney
  • December 2018
  • weekend
  • information
  • data
  • summarise
  • select
  • report
  • features
  • analysis
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